The candle is burnt;
The flame no longer claims lives;
The wax has evaporated,
Traces of soot hang here and there,
Nightmares trouble the dead mind,
Tugging at the dead heart,
Claiming what is still alive,
The darkness all around is purged,
With the light of your soul,
It is not yet time,
To give up,
Come, rise from the ashes,
No, no Christ...
But YOU...
10 comments:
hmm well written .. if not a bit dark
pretty deep meaning to it...gud stuff!!
Hi Dee..nice poem..but work on your punctuation now..pay attention on that..read modern poetry or the poem that i have written as your testi to understand what i'm saying..
refine ypour language..do use commanplace words but in a refined manner..you can do it..coz you are good at it..
Wow deepti,
well written
sharad
Christ doesn't rise from ashes, thats a phoenix... or so i heard...
Very nicely written with deep meanings to it.
Hugs!
Stay Beautiful...!
when you say "candle no more claims lives" whose lives are you talking about?
WOW!
Keshi.
wow its awesome..i like this..
The darkness all around is purged,
With the light of your soul,
It is not yet time,
To give up,
Come, rise from the ashes,
No, no Christ...
But YOU...
good day..
Aditi: didnt mean to be dark...
Neo: hmmm, if u say so...
Anu:Yes sweetheart n keep pouring in suggestions...
Sharad: thanx sharad
Nahal: thanx sweetheart...
hws life?
Nabeel: with these "lives" i meant Dreams my dear...
Keshi: thanx
Pankaj: thanx pankaj
Pi: well i know Christ didnt rise from ashes,therefore the image of the phoenix n therefore its the divine energy inside the man thats being invoked n not the gods or messiahs...
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