Thursday, November 20, 2008

ALTERNATIVE...


Draping the truth to adorn a lie,
A smile to easily utter a sigh,

Loneliness be woven within the fabric,
Love bleeds fast the color of a dye,

Unit conversion, best understood,
When a step away you see distance multiply,

Desires and longing and yearning arrive at,
A presumed past that pricks every try,

Crouching and crawling in the shadowy corners,
With words that subsume the urge to cry,

How long shall we sit and stare up above,
Lets hang “Mirage”, earth over the sky.

14 comments:

Mampi said...

You have caught the spirit of the genre. The conclusive sher is predictably the best OcMi.

oceanic mirages said...

Mampi: Nawazish mohtarma :)
m glad that i have found favours, thankyou...

oceanic mirages said...

Mampi: yes u r right, will do it soon...

How do we know said...

Unit conversion, best understood,
When a step away you see distance multiply.. this is perhaps the best thing i have read on ur blog.. its so striking!!

human being said...

the beauty blooms into a fire in the last line... contrary to many poems, we do not hear just lament... there is an alternative... very revolutionary...
reminded me of Khayyam the great Iranian poet...

Cynthia said...

So lovely, you've captured the
nature of longing and desire.

adi said...

:)

extinguish the laments, unfurl the hopes//lets dream mirage, of the days to come by

the kind of state i'm in these days, i absolutely adore these lines dee. the 3rd and the last couplet especially.

but then 'aadat se majboor hoon', had to say something positive na :)

Dr. Jay SW said...

Veerrryy interesting, particularly the desires, longing, yearning pricked by the presumed past, and the truth adorning a lie....

dharmabum said...

am still waiting for the reaction...!

Impressionist said...

damn! that was brilliant!
esp these lines
"Unit conversion, best understood,
When a step away you see distance multiply,"

-I

Mampi said...

You are awarded a humble award.
Come over to my blog as and when you can, to accept it.
It would give me immense pleasure.

Tanvi said...

"Lets hang “Mirage”, earth over the sky"

It sounds so...wonderful!

I am glad to have discovered your blog, really. :)

mirage said...

Oceanic Mirages,
I am really glad to have discovered your blog. All your lines are just so "mind-blowing" (archana style)..
It takes me days to come out of your blogs..
keep up the good work...
best wishes - Hema

human being said...

Happy New Year!
Dee...
may all your days in the coming year brim with love, peace and happiness..

and i wish you can write more...

one of the sparkly things i found last year was you...
you are a gem... both as a poet and as a friend...

concentric spirals

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